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some of my god forsaken poetry
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March 9, 2011 - 11:47 pm
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Now the poll works.

"it is easy to grow crazy"

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March 11, 2011 - 8:44 am
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false enlightenment

they bring thee to thy fate, frozen behind time
fashioning the slumber into an ecstasy

a being becoming, a different star dust
lies furiously told: an awakening caught in the ways of the flesh
this one's principal wind: divinity.

our now that has the love
I of our breathless, disembodied essence
with a punishing fate, diversities opened, chanting nobility
reign thee over all that is you.

the waves of the way eroding age-old levies
celebration of the undead rising
lungs filled with wind and silence
they, tamed by laughter
fables having a timeless source

ways of wisdom overwhelming the strength of words.

"it is easy to grow crazy"

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March 13, 2011 - 10:46 am
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why "false enlightenment"?

Willie Wonka quotes..
What is this Wonka, some kind of funhouse?
Why? Are you having fun?
A little nonsense now and then is relished by the wisest men.
We are the music makers, we are the dreamers of dreams

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March 13, 2011 - 2:33 pm
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Your guess is as good as mine. 😛

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March 18, 2011 - 7:52 am
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any kind of enlightenment is enlightment..to chose and decide is just ego driven snobbery
(which goes against enlightenment)
just an opinon
you need to add a question mark to your title (or first line)
I feel, just my opinion

Willie Wonka quotes..
What is this Wonka, some kind of funhouse?
Why? Are you having fun?
A little nonsense now and then is relished by the wisest men.
We are the music makers, we are the dreamers of dreams

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March 18, 2011 - 9:32 am
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😯 After it's written I don't edit.

"it is easy to grow crazy"

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March 19, 2011 - 8:16 am
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that's very..um..honest of you
it is what it is
organic

Willie Wonka quotes..
What is this Wonka, some kind of funhouse?
Why? Are you having fun?
A little nonsense now and then is relished by the wisest men.
We are the music makers, we are the dreamers of dreams

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March 19, 2011 - 10:57 am
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I lied.

After a while sitting in my poetry collection, I realized that I wrote "A massage that is a message" but instead I wrote "a massage that is a massage." That was the one time I edited something.

A lot of grate things come by accident. I think editing kind of teaches the writer to not have accidents which might sound good.

Lots of the time, the word you in my poetry is nothing more than a reference to me. False enlightenment is a concept explored in Fight Club. The acid scene.

Well I'm still not sure why "false enlightenment" came out. I'm sure it means something to someone. :mrgreen:

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March 20, 2011 - 11:26 pm
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In an effort to try to not be so rigid-minded, I have edited a poem that I called implosion swirling.

http://www.alphaomegadimension.info/med ... losion.pdf

I'm working on a new poem .. could take a while though. I was present for a conversation between musicians and one asked the other: do you ever write music you can't play? All the time, was the response. At the moment, I have a poem but articulating what I want to articulate is something that's difficult for me. It's got something to do with Taoism, theories of everything, and reality; so I probably won't do these subjects justice since they're all so over my head. But I'll do what I can.

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March 22, 2011 - 6:39 am
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I like it. I like it a-lot.
😎

Willie Wonka quotes..
What is this Wonka, some kind of funhouse?
Why? Are you having fun?
A little nonsense now and then is relished by the wisest men.
We are the music makers, we are the dreamers of dreams

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